Caporal 10 Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 None is tchating with me But they kept hurting me My ears are ringing Every one is watching They are all wearing masks But i keep seeing their scaring gaze I will embrace this darkness That will put an end to my distress Sink in this dark water Which will hide my nakedness I's all i can do sorry.:D Where have you been hiding these proses ? :D I can see real potentiel in this section... Good job.. But I can't tell how serieus you are in your poetry :D Looks like a talent to me :thumbup: Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Guest from nulle part Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 Some rules when you practice english: Relax, stay natural and don't think too much. Just let it come out as it is. Don't try to be perfect. It's only a second or third language... See you later... I leave you with the original song [YOUTUBE]8fwY3jGNsog[/YOUTUBE] oh I love this song:thumbup: I will learn by heart(par coeur:mdr:) Citer Link to post Share on other sites
DemonAngelic 10 Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 Where have you been hiding these proses ? :D I can see real potentiel in this section... Good job.. But I can't tell how serieus you are in your poetry :D Looks like a talent to me :thumbup: :(Don't make fun of me you meanie.:bawling: Really you think that i have some potentiel.:rolleyes: Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Caporal 10 Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 oh I love this song:thumbup: I will learn by heart(par coeur:mdr:) If you learn it you must sing it :04: Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Guest from nulle part Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 If you learn it you must sing it :04: :mdr::mdr: I don't have good voice but you yes elvis capo:crazy: Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Caporal 10 Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 :(Don't make fun of me you meanie.:bawling: Really you think that i have some potentiel.:rolleyes: I swear I ain't making fun of you ! Only you have to do now is make your lyrics simple so that one can underdstand the message you're trying to give... I've done one aprt of the song and I'm actually working on the second. Apparently, everybody's faster than me :D Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Caporal 10 Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 :mdr::mdr: I don't have good voice but you yes elvis capo:crazy: Shall we do an Elvis song ?? Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Caporal 10 Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 My modest half a contribution :o Everything’s crumbling on me. I can feel them things falling, on the remains of my heart. People pretend they’re caring, but i can see them laughing, from the corner of my eyes. Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Guest from nulle part Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 Shall we do an Elvis song ?? I know full song of elvis Citer Link to post Share on other sites
DemonAngelic 10 Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 I swear I ain't making fun of you ! Only you have to do now is make your lyrics simple so that one can underdstand the message you're trying to give... I've done one aprt of the song and I'm actually working on the second. Apparently, everybody's faster than me :D Ok i believe you capo. What you said, is that my lyrics are too complex for a biginner?? Or is it for everybody?? You are too slow.:D Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Caporal 10 Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 Ok i believe you capo. What you said, is that my lyrics are too complex for a biginner?? Or is it for everybody?? You are too slow.:D Try to keep it simple to touch us all. One emotion per sentence is perfect I'm finished at last murFrape Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Caporal 10 Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 Everything’s crumbling on me. I can feel them things falling, on the remains of my heart. People pretend they’re caring, but i can see them laughing, from the corner of my eyes. I’m going to seek some places Far away from my inner wound. Going where you can’t reach me, High up on a rocky eagle’s land. Then I’ll cry my sorrow and sip the last ever glass of my tears. Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Caporal 10 Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 Ok let's do some Elvis.. Try to make this song sound funny The wonder of you When no-one else can understand me When everything I do is wrong You give me love and consolation You give me hope to carry on And you're always there to lend a hand In everything I do That's the wonder The wonder of you And when you smile the world is brighter You touch my hand and I'm a king Your face to me is worth a fortune Your love for me is everything I guess I'll never know the reason why You love me as you do That's the wonder The wonder of you Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Guest from nulle part Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 Ok let's do some Elvis.. Try to make this song sound funny The wonder of you When no-one else can understand me When everything I do is wrong You give me love and consolation You give me hope to carry on And you're always there to lend a hand In everything I do That's the wonder The wonder of you And when you smile the world is brighter You touch my hand and I'm a king Your face to me is worth a fortune Your love for me is everything I guess I'll never know the reason why You love me as you do That's the wonder The wonder of you take me this soirée pour le faire:) Citer Link to post Share on other sites
DemonAngelic 10 Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 Everything’s crumbling on me. I can feel them things falling, on the remains of my heart. People pretend they’re caring, but i can see them laughing, from the corner of my eyes. I’m going to seek some places Far away from my inner wound. Going where you can’t reach me, High up on a rocky eagle’s land. Then I’ll cry my sorrow and sip the last ever glass of my tears. Wawwwww, it is so beautiful and simple as you said. Thank's a lot capo for your guidance. Ps: capo could you give me an other task?:rolleyes:? Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Caporal 10 Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 rewrite The Wonder of You in a funny form. I've put the song above Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Caporal 10 Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 ..and here's the video [YOUTUBE]BEQ6mEmDX5k[/YOUTUBE] Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Guest from nulle part Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 ..and here's the video [YOUTUBE]BEQ6mEmDX5k[/YOUTUBE] I want you tell me about elvis things about him Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Caporal 10 Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 I want you tell me about elvis things about him Elvis was a good human being and a great artist. That's all I know about him :D Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Guest from nulle part Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 Elvis was a good human being and a great artist. That's all I know about him :D he had one wife in his life and he made army....... Citer Link to post Share on other sites
DemonAngelic 10 Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 he had one wife in his life and he made army....... Why to get one chick when he could have 10?? You mean , he joined the army or did the military service.:D Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Caporal 10 Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 C'mon girls, practice.. I gave you a task ? It's easy ;) Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Guest from nulle part Posted December 4, 2011 Partager Posted December 4, 2011 Why to get one chick when he could have 10?? You mean , he joined the army or did the military service.:D h made army,il a fait l'armée but one wife,il sait marier avec une seule he married with one wife Citer Link to post Share on other sites
Caporal 10 Posted December 5, 2011 Partager Posted December 5, 2011 If you don't like it, change it as you wish The wonder of you : When no-one else can release me, when everytime I run I looooose. You gave me hell and aggravation, you put plaster on both my knees. And you're always there to break my hand, and every bit and piece of my nooose. That's the wonder The plunder of you And when you shout, my world is over, you order me down and I do kneel. Your face to me is like a torture, your wedding cost me all, and everything. I guess I'll never find, a damn way out, the way you hold your shoe on my torse. That's the wonder The plunder of you Citer Link to post Share on other sites
DemonAngelic 10 Posted December 5, 2011 Partager Posted December 5, 2011 h made army,il a fait l'armée but one wife,il sait marier avec une seule he married with one wife :p Yeaah i did understand what you said, but as i am rebellious, i want to comment.:D Citer Link to post Share on other sites
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